Need English grammar help please...

CloudWalkerCloudWalker Member Posts: 24
edited November -1 in Working with GS (Mac)
Hello everyone,my first game with GS almost done:>
but my Mother language is not English XD,so please help me to correct my sentences.

Here is them:

April 21,2533,The Earth was attacked by T-Alien Union...(dont laugh,maybe other words)

The earth has almost been taken...

City is burning...

Can you be the Saviour ?

Six year after the battles,the world has been saved.

Touch the adge of the screen to fire.

That's all.Are these correct?Hope you can help me:)

Comments

  • ktfrightktfright Member Posts: 964
    I hope you dont mind that I added a bit to zazz it up.

    "On April 21, 2533,The Earth was attacked by The T-Alien Union

    The earth has almost been taken captive...

    Major cities are burning to the ground...

    Can you be the Savior of us all?

    Six years after the battles and wars, the world has finally been saved.

    Touch the edge of the screen to fire."
  • CloudWalkerCloudWalker Member Posts: 24
    Thank you Ktfright , it is much better:)
  • TymeMasterTymeMaster Member Posts: 527
    tshirtbooth said:
    you forgot to add "all your base are belong to us"

    :)

    lol
  • ORBZORBZ Member Posts: 1,304
    April 21,2533,The Earth was attacked by T-Alien Union...(dont laugh,maybe other words)

    April 21, 2533, mess'd up real badz. Some alien mo'fos jacked da' earf.

    The earth has almost been taken...

    We is almost deaded

    City is burning...

    All da' buildings iz burninatoring

    Can you be the Saviour ?

    Is you of use to us? Are you Jesus?

    Six year after the battles,the world has been saved.

    Six years, we is saved! Hooray!

    Touch the adge of the screen to fire.

    Touch dis' n' shoot
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