Little english translation

gamevicci

Hi guys,
I need a little english "correction" for the description of my new game, I can offer 20€ via paypal now , I send you the description and you correct my bad "italian" english in your great "native-tongue" english!!

magic101hi

i bet some people here would do it for free just post it up here

-Josh

gamevicci

Ok i try :

Parking Heroes

The parking heroes are coming!

Do you want to work for the Boss? So show him how you can park!

Choose between 5 mad drivers:

- Jack Black , the never-ending smiling blind man!

- Sonny Sorry , the shy and timid nerd

- Jason Whiskey , the man with no driving license!!

- Miss Boob , so sweat you will forgive her everything..

- Metal Bob , the tough guy of the road!

In the game you will drive your car from a park to the next, running against the time, but be careful to don't break too much your car against walls and traffic!!

The 2d colorful graphics are easy and funny, and enjoyable musics will attend you during the game.

Controls are simple and configurable between portrait and landscape mode.
Shake your phone to watch the map! And follow the yellow arrow to find the next park…

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- 30 levels
- 5 mad characters
- 2 difficulty levels
- portrait and landscape mode
- practice mode to study maps!
- map mode activable with shake
- directional arrow to show the next park

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Respond to the challenge and try to become the Boss's personal driver!!

MotherHoose

Parking Heroes

The Parking Heroes are coming!

Do you want to work for the Boss?

Show the Man how you can park!

Choose your persona:
- Jack Black , an endlessly smiling blind man!
- Sonny Sorry , a shy and timid nerd!
- Jason Whiskey , a man with no driving license!!
- Miss Boob , so sweet you will forgive her everything..
- Metal Bob , one tough guy on the road!

Drive your car from one park to the next … Race the clock while avoiding damage from crashes!

2d colorful graphics and enjoyable music add to your ease and fun.
Controls are simple to use and configurable between portrait and landscape mode.


Shake your phone to view the map!
And follow the yellow arrow to find the next park…

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-30 levels

- 5 mad characters

- 2 difficulty levels

- portrait and landscape mode

- practice mode to study maps!

- map mode activation with shake

- directional arrows showing the next park
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Respond to the challenge and Become the Boss's Personal Driver!!

English was wonderful... Lightened up and made less formal.
sweet = sugary; sweat = salty drips

if you use... you owe me a promo!
Good luck... sounds like fun to be a mad driver!

MH

Photics

The text is not too bad. There are some big mistakes though...

It's sweet, not sweat.

I think "activates" is better than "activable" ...which isn't a word.

gamevicci said:
In the game you will drive your car from a park to the next, running against the time, but be careful to don't break too much your car against walls and traffic!!

The 2d colorful graphics are easy and funny, and enjoyable musics will attend you during the game.

Controls are simple and configurable between portrait and landscape mode.
Shake your phone to watch the map! And follow the yellow arrow to find the next park…

These paragraphs need work.

gamevicci

MotherHoose said:
English was wonderful... Lightened up and made less formal.
sweet = sugary; sweat = salty drips

if you use... you owe me a promo!
Good luck... sounds like fun to be a mad driver!

MH

Wow!!! It's perfect!!
I owe you more than a promo!! (send me at least your email!)

Thanks also to photics

MotherHoose

email:
MotherHoose

gmail
.com

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I am glad you liked it... I get so much help in the forum... it is good to give back!
and, you gave me such nice meat to carve into!

the "Boss's" is technically incorrect should be "Boss' "... I deliberately let it stand... as it reads easier as is.

MH