Very nice but I would post them in a different order. I also doubt if the English in the last picture is right but I'll leave that to the native speakers here. My order would be 2, 3, 5, 4, 1
I reckon you should ditch number 1 and 2 and put game shots instead.
The English in screen 5 would be better if you said "... but I'll add a condition"
Shaz
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The punctuation isn't correct. Professional translators are adept at conveying the true meaning of a statement from one language to another, but they aren't necessarily masters of grammar. I've retyped it using as much of original text as possible (This is just one way of doing it).
Hello Laura, my name is Gabel. I will help you on your adventure, but there is one condition. I will only help you if you can solve the puzzles I have for you. Good luck and see you later.
I would get rid of the Menus, whenever I see menus in the App store I think the developer has something to hide, look at the top successful paid Apps most of them don't have menu screen-shots. Look at the free Apps most have menus in screen-shots. Lets see more of the game, It's a bit hard to tell what you actually do in the game. Anyway that's just my opinion I'm now marketing expert but that's what would make me buy it.
Good comments in here, and nice artwork, but here's something else to consider...
When Apple features you in a more prominent spot... like in "New" role-playing... they grab the first screenshot, instead of your app icon, for the listing. So, the lead picture is important.
Photics said: Good comments in here, and nice artwork, but here's something else to consider...
When Apple features you in a more prominent spot... like in "New" role-playing... they grab the first screenshot, instead of your app icon, for the listing. So, the lead picture is important.
Photics hello, sorry but I am Spanish, do you mean by "LADE picture" type of screen that you think I should have?
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I also doubt if the English in the last picture is right but I'll leave that to the native speakers here.
My order would be 2, 3, 5, 4, 1
Lump Apps and My Assets
The English in screen 5 would be better if you said "... but I'll add a condition"
Shaz
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"...the resulting sonic effect is almost mesmerising." Pocket Gamer
Sound design and music service available: http://tiny.cc/MusicService
www.HoneyTribeStudios.com
Perhaps a collage of more puzzles is better?
Lump Apps and My Assets
Lump Apps and My Assets
The punctuation isn't correct. Professional translators are adept at conveying the true meaning of a statement from one language to another, but they aren't necessarily masters of grammar. I've retyped it using as much of original text as possible (This is just one way of doing it).
Hello Laura, my name is Gabel. I will help you on your adventure, but there is one condition. I will only help you if you can solve the puzzles I have for you. Good luck and see you later.
When Apple features you in a more prominent spot... like in "New" role-playing... they grab the first screenshot, instead of your app icon, for the listing. So, the lead picture is important.