★★★ Little Laura: The Mystery on the appstore ★★★

RUPASRUPAS Member Posts: 823
edited November -1 in Announce Your Game!
Hello friends! expected adventure game is already on the appstore, I hope your help Thanks

http://itunes.apple.com/us/app/little-laura-the-mystery/id462242118?l=es&ls=1&mt=8

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  • ShineyGamesShineyGames Member Posts: 157
    Fingers Crossed for you
  • RUPASRUPAS Member Posts: 823
    In the middle of the night some voices wake Laura up, her parents hace disappeared, anything she reminds there exists now, determined to discover what has happened and to find her parents, Laura with Gabel will undertake what will be the adventure of their lives, will Laura like what she will discover, are you ready to help Laura? Forward with Gabel´s help, a detective who always help you in exchange for your help to solve puzzles and riddles discover what happened to Laura and her family.

    Main features

    HD graphics that squeeze the most out of your iPhone display retina.

    Find keys, solve puzzles, find hidden objects and much more!

    Use headphones for greater experience.

    All this and much more in Little Laura: The Mystery

    http://itunes.apple.com/us/app/little-laura-the-mystery/id462242118?l=es&ls=1&mt=8
  • beefy_clyrobeefy_clyro Member Posts: 5,394
    Second thread you've created for this in an hour!! Give people time to see it. The English in your description is not too accurate either, i would recommend getting that sorted out, today really if it is release day.
  • RUPASRUPAS Member Posts: 823
    Mmmm English is not correct .... I have not got time to find a decent translator, help me??
  • DigiChainDigiChain Member, PRO Posts: 1,288
    Hi RUPAS.

    Good luck with this. I'm working on an adventure too so would be great to know how sales are.

    One very important point though - the description translation to English in the app store is terrible! It'll definitely put people off buying your game. Hopefully your in-game translation is better.

    I've quickly rewritten it for you. I strongly recommend you use this rewrite of get someone else to look at it for you:

    In the middle of the night Laura is awoken by voices. Her parents have disappeared, only their memories remain.
    Laura is determined to find out what has happened to them – and will now embark on a life changing adventure.
    But Laura is not alone - a detective named Gabel will help her on the journey, but in return Laura must help Gabel to solve a series of puzzles and riddles.

    Can Laura discover what has happened to her family? Are you ready to help her on the adventure?...
  • DigiChainDigiChain Member, PRO Posts: 1,288
    I've dropped a rewrite in your other post.
  • RUPASRUPAS Member Posts: 823
    thank you very much! I've changed, really thank you very much, and that you hire a professional translator .....
  • beefy_clyrobeefy_clyro Member Posts: 5,394
    Digi-chain done this for you in your other thread and i suggest changing your iTunes description immediately ....

    In the middle of the night Laura is awoken by voices. Her parents have disappeared, only their memories remain.
    Laura is determined to find out what has happened to them – and will now embark on a life changing adventure.
    But Laura is not alone - a detective named Gabel will help her on the journey, but in return Laura must help Gabel to solve a series of puzzles and riddles.

    Can Laura discover what has happened to her family? Are you ready to help her on the adventure?...
  • beefy_clyrobeefy_clyro Member Posts: 5,394
    If you hired a translator i would ask for a refund. The translation is bad. In your show case thread, people warned you the translation wasn't very good but you went ahead anyway, just hope this doesn't end up being the downfall to your game.
  • App SurgeApp Surge Member Posts: 651
    RUPAS, I would recommend using QS. His descriptions are amazing!
  • RUPASRUPAS Member Posts: 823
    when people talk in the thread the game was completely finished ....
  • RUPASRUPAS Member Posts: 823
    thanks truth and I changed the ringtone from itunes, thanks really .... QS RedSky I talk but I have now $ 80 .... : (
  • GaranasGaranas Member Posts: 86
    @RUPAS - stop spamming, this is not the "annouce your game" forum
  • RUPASRUPAS Member Posts: 823
    Garanas said:
    @RUPAS - stop spamming, this is not the "annouce your game" forum

    no comment....
  • beefy_clyrobeefy_clyro Member Posts: 5,394
    RUPAS said:
    when people talk in the thread the game was completely finished ....

    Translation could of been changed, its a major part of your game!
  • Rob2Rob2 Member Posts: 2,402
    Get a promo to someone so they can make some sense of it all and get a rewrite done as soon as possible.

    At the moment your Images are good, your icon is poor and your text is a disaster. It seems such a shame to mess up at this stage when the potential for a real success is there (I'm assuming it plays as good as it looks).
  • RUPASRUPAS Member Posts: 823
    damn translator! screwing me 4 months of work

    [[ I edited your post to be a *little* less offensive, and I've merged your two posts into one as they had exactly the same title! - Cheers, QS :D ]]
  • RUPASRUPAS Member Posts: 823
    Ok, QS i understand. Thanks and sorry.

    I do not understand you need to do to appear in the Highlights section in the appstore, I understand that you said that the translation is bad but I've changed, and in my country the translation is perfect game is in 2 languages.
  • RUPASRUPAS Member Posts: 823
    if someone is willing to leave a good comment, send an email to me to get a code rupas30@hotmail.com
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