"you lose" alternatives?

ElfizmElfizm Member Posts: 489
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Hello

So I have levels that when completed say one of the above. What would be better suited because to me that does not sound professional. My thoughts were "Try Again" but that too didn't sound too good. Any ideas what people might use that doesn't sound hash but encourages them to play again?
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  • IsabelleKIsabelleK Member, Sous Chef Posts: 2,807
    GAME OVER - classic, and simple :)
  • slinky1988slinky1988 Member, PRO Posts: 89
    'Almost there!' or 'You're so close!'.
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  • KangavarkKangavark Member Posts: 62
    Go crazy! This is your chance to show some personality in your game. I say go nuts and say a variety of things like "You can do better than that!" or be semi-insulting and say "Seriously, are you even trying?" Or you can be encouraging and say "Not too shabby, try to beat X score"
  • gamesfuagamesfua Member Posts: 723
    Or hows about- "That was so pitiful i'm sending you a refund. Come back when you can play better than your 99 cents."
    That'll win them over ;)
  • SlickZeroSlickZero Houston, TexasMember, Sous Chef Posts: 2,870
    How about - "Im not saying you lost...But you certainly didn't win"
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  • ApexApex Member, PRO Posts: 56
    How about "Loser!" :)
  • ElfizmElfizm Member Posts: 489
    Well I gotta say some of your suggestions are very creative, and for sake of "copyright issues" I will not say which I like. @SlickZero :)

    But thanks @TheMoonwalls @NAS-M
    @Kangavark @Apex

    I can't really say they can't play better then thier 99c since it's a free game @anatomyofdreams so don't want to misguide players :)

    But on a serious you guys inspired me in a strange crazy way to let my imagination go crazy and came up with one.

    Many thanks
    Elfizm


  • sparkaniasparkania Member, PRO Posts: 300
    edited January 2013
    Go Billy Madison on it...
    "Dear Player, how you played... was one of the most insanely idiotic things I have ever seen. At no point in your bumbling, asinine strategy were you even close to anything that could be considered a victory. Even the AI in this game is now dumber for having witnessed it. I award you no points, and may God have mercy on your soul"
  • ElfizmElfizm Member Posts: 489
    Haha @sparkania

    Made my night, although I feel maybe I might be writing a book instead of a game :)
    Or it's time to do some voice acting.
    Good job man
  • SocksSocks London, UK.Member Posts: 12,822
    What about simply:

    "Please, never have children"
  • ElfizmElfizm Member Posts: 489
    @socks

    Thought about that but then realized I am losing my kid target audience because they won't know how to have children and then it would just be pointless to say and I could lose a lot of downloads because of it. I gotta find something to make everyone motivated :)
  • SocksSocks London, UK.Member Posts: 12,822
    edited January 2013
    @Elfizm

    :D

    Ok, how about:

    "You know that game you've just played, you know, the one you suck at ? Well it's now over and looking at the points you've amassed it's safe to say that you aren't great at it".
  • ElfizmElfizm Member Posts: 489
    @Elfizm

    :D

    Ok, how about:

    "You know that game you've just played, you know, the one you suck at ? Well it's now over and looking at the points you've amassed it's safe to say that you aren't great at it".
    @socks

    If that doesn't make me win most motivating app of 2013.... I don't know what will!!
  • capitalcarnagecapitalcarnage Member Posts: 371
    How about
    "would you prefer an easier level?"
  • ElfizmElfizm Member Posts: 489
    @capitalcarnage

    One problem with that:

    If they lose on level one, it tells me they aren't smart, but if I go a head and say "would you prefer an easier level?"
    Chances are they are going to say yes.
    Then find out there isn't any easier level and rate the game badly for misleading info, which in good time will affect the downloads of the game in a bad way...... And I don't want that :)
  • gamesfuagamesfua Member Posts: 723
    edited January 2013
    Perhaps you should go meta on them. Existensial. "Your game has ended... If you believe in 'endings.' An ending is merely the moment before a new beginning. Without an ending there is no journey. So in a way, the loss you have accomplished is actually the beginning for something greater. Your game might be over... But it has also just begun."
    Then just add a link for best methods of growing weed at home.
    ;)

    In all seriousness, i tend to like things that arent so final. Game over makes the game too final. Its not inviting to play again. Id say try to find a word choice that alerts the gamer they momentarily failed at their goal, but are encouraged to get back up and show them whos boss!
  • ElfizmElfizm Member Posts: 489
    @anatomyofdreams
    Not sure why I read that in a Spock voice..... Which seems inlogical.

    But that a side, do you have any examples at top of your head, maybe ones that are not paragraphs in lengths? It needs to be just two to four words long in my opinion
  • gamesfuagamesfua Member Posts: 723
    edited January 2013
    Something like, "Your adventure ended... Doesnt mean its over." User can hit play or quit. Something that alerts the player an attempt is done, but encouraging enough to journey ahead.
    Or maybe a bit more bad ass...
    "When you fall down..." Then choice "you pick yourself up (play). And the other choice, "you stay down." (Quit).
    Somethingnlike that
  • mrpacogpmrpacogp Member Posts: 400
    Alot of games using "Fail!"
    Whats about to use a universal symbol?
    Like ® is trademark, √ is check and ok, this can report alot of time to translating our game to another locations...
  • sparkaniasparkania Member, PRO Posts: 300
    ya'know.. at the risk of loosing a usable idea.. I don't know exactly what the theme of you game is, but if you made it a touch "edgy" you could gain some notoriety with exactly the insulting loosing phrases we have listed here.. There's something to it.. Just think.. not to long ago, people paid 50 cents a call to "Dial an Insult"
  • SocksSocks London, UK.Member Posts: 12,822
    ya'know.. at the risk of loosing a usable idea.. I don't know exactly what the theme of you game is . . .
    It's a game aimed at people with low self-esteem, it aims to build up their sense of self-confidence and self-worth - and in those more afflicted - drag them away from the precipice of looming self-doubt, self-harm and eventual suicide.
  • capitalcarnagecapitalcarnage Member Posts: 371
    @Elfizm - I see the problem, My only other suggestions involve a lot of f's a few s's and a c so I'll keep that under my hat.
  • famekraftsfamekrafts Member, BASIC Posts: 834
    Game not yet over, please try the slot machine next
  • JDuaneJJDuaneJ San Francisco Member Posts: 300
    You can just say Finnish, or Complete. That is relatively unbiased.

    Round Over
    Round Done
    Game Over
    Game Complete
    Try Again
    Round Complete
    Nice Try
    Better Luck Next Time
    Whoopsie Try Again
    Not Bad But No Cigar
    Failure is an Option for Some
    Level Complete
    Defeated
    You Lost
    Game Concluded

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  • sparkaniasparkania Member, PRO Posts: 300
    oops.. for kids..?
    "Maybe you should have stayed with finger-paints"
    "No wonder Mom always caught you stealing cookies"
    "And to think, Your Father spent $300 for this device"
    "4,000,000 bytes of Game, 300 hours of development, 20 minutes of gameplay, and you couldn't show 1 bit of skill" (too much?)
  • RPRP Member Posts: 1,990
    You suck. Heh heh

    What was that one someone used before "Epic fail"? Yeah, that cliche makes someone want to jump right back on again.

    Before offering suggestions, what is the theme of the game? Got any screenies?
    Maybe the wording can be tailored to fit the mood/atmoshpere.

    Voice overs also do add a nice touch, and for kids, somthing upbeat, cute and yet slightly mocking them to encourage them to try again. Also the delivery of the of the "lose/try again" screen/ text will ceratinly be an imporant impact point to consider. They way it springs in, bounces in etc. with any special effects, shines, sparkeles, smoke etc.

    Rambling on now...
  • GeniusbearGeniusbear Member Posts: 107
    When the game is about Jersey "You've shocked the system, BRO"
  • SlickZeroSlickZero Houston, TexasMember, Sous Chef Posts: 2,870

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  • ElfizmElfizm Member Posts: 489
    @RP @SlickZero @Geniusbear @sparkania @JDuaneJ @wickedsunny @capitalcarnage @Socks @mrpacogp

    Thanks for letting your ideas run wild :)
    But I actually took the more logical way and tested different sayings with kids and adults the last couple of days as the target market is everyone. It seemed like a good laugh for the adults but the kids didn't know if they had won or not. So then they judged my non completed game and found that while some would laugh, being simple like the game itself is the way to go. So right now the two sayings are "you lost" and "Welldone"

    It was also noted they didn't like reading big sentences so short and sweet it is. It's not very motivating but least it isn't telling people that they have no skill :)

    All the best
  • sparkaniasparkania Member, PRO Posts: 300
    ;) well.. of course the answers provided were in good fun ;) might you replace "You Lost" with "Try Again" though
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